She creased my heart to make
an impression, ambient
thoughts blend with memories
woven from life before you left
a mark on me the last time.
So I look to the future, folding
new experiences like
an origami lotus flower —
now germinated — shoots shouting
in the sun not for the last time.
© 2021 Phillip Knight Scott
dVerse Poets Pub: Quadrille #134: We {heart} poems where we must construct a poem of 44 words including the given word “heart”
Also submitted for Weekly Scribblings #84: The Last Time
Okay, first of all, there’s a poem just in the phrase “origami lotus flower.” LOVE. There is so much hope in this poem.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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I love the thought of origami, and how much can come from creases
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Thank so much, Bjorn!
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So a lovely poignant image–that heart creased with thoughts and memories.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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Wonderfully vivid imagery here. I smiled with the first two lines and found the remainder to be just as delightful. Delightfully done, all said, well-contained and satisfying to the end.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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Love the hope in this. The imagery is superb, like you’ve folded several great poems into one.
Especially like
“an origami lotus flower —
now germinated — shoots shouting”
Just beautiful!
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So kind – thanks!
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There is pain, but there is a strength of spirit to continue. I really like the origami lotus that you created that is filled with presence.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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You’re very welcome, Phillip.
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Oh, wow. This is incredible. I keep reading it over and over. So beautiful.
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I love the shouting shoots!! Well done.
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Thanks so much Bev 🙂
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Lovely poem. I especially like the lines: “So I look to the future, folding/new experiences like/an origami lotus flower”
And I agree with De – “origami lotus flower” is a poem in itself.
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Thanks!!
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Wow!
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Thanks Lucy 🙂
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So I look to the future, folding
new experiences like
an origami lotus flower —
This is such a great line!
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A future filled with hope and the fragrant lotus!
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Creases of origami! What a cool idea!!
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Thank you 🙂
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My pleasure. 😊
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shoots shouting promised so much hope. creased heart is such a vivid image, too.
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Thanks so much!
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I love how the origami effect of your words is enhanced by your use of enjambment – great quadrille!
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Thank you so much, Ingrid 🙂
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I can totally imagine an origami flower – that’s so clever, Phillip. Well done, Sir!
❤
David
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Thanks!!
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A splendid little poem. Well done.
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Thanks, Bill!
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You’re welcome.
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Reading thru comments, I have to say they’ve said everything that came to my mind. Well done!!!!
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Thanks, Helen!
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This is so lovely!
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Thanks so much 🙂
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Very nicely done, to fit both prompts at once, so seamlessly.
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“folding new experiences like an origami lotus flower,” is such a gorgeous image! 💝💝
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We can’t unmake those creases, but there is always hope of creating something new and lovely with the folds.
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Very elegant poem…polished write.
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She creased my heart to make
an impression, ambient
thoughts blend with memories
It’s so nice Phillip to have thoughts for someone dear. Great opening!
Hank
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Thanks so much 🙂
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“origami lotus flower” – Wow!
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Thanks so much : )
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Amazing imagery. And I love how “the last time” holds negative meaning in the beginning and at the end it’s something positive
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Thanks so much : )
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Lovely piece Phillip. Quite a vivid picture. Hugs 🤗 Joni
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Thanks Joni : )
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My pleasure. ❤️🤗
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