The house on Marford peaks
above the hedge, shaggy tiles
(dulled to grey from years
in the sun) frown
under the weight of domestic
solitude.
Isolation trickled down the chimney
until the walls began to rot
(like fruit in the sun
too long) until the squat couple
can’t bear to peek
through the window.
The mail carrier doesn’t
even bother anymore.
© 2021 Phillip Knight Scott
#dverse poets pub asks us to imagine being outside looking into a house of our choice. I used this picture as inspiration.
Wow, that makes a vivid picture. Really nice piece. 🤗Joni
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Thanks so much, Joni 🙂
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🦋🤗
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“Isolation trickled down the chimney until the walls began to rot (like fruit in the sun too long),” .. this is such a strong image! 💝
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I really enjoyed this poem – the personification is so subtle and I like how you mirrored house and squat couple with peaking/peeking?
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Thanks so much 🙂 Glad you enjoyed it!
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I too love the imagery here:
“Isolation trickled down the chimney
until the walls began to rot
(like fruit in the sun
too long)”
It’s gorgeous and I feel like this house is nearly abandoned, even if it’s still lived in. I find that haunting and realistic in a way. Beautifully written! You can really feel the wall rot too, such a feeling in a rundown and old house. Makes you wonder what it smells like after so many years; you may as well become accustomed to it after so long.
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Oh the smell! You don’t want to imagine it 🙂
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“Isolation trickled down the chimney” …. what a wonderfuhly braphic phrase. It really sets the tone for your poem.
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Loved your use of parentheses. Very evocative imagery.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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You are welcome.
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A beautiful poem ~ a sad poem ~~ well penned.
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Thanks, Helen!
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When I read “domestic solitude” I know something is amiss. It is confirmed when “isolation trickles down the chimney (a metaphorical source of warmth) until … rot.” Such an oppressive atmospheric piece.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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You are welcome.
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The house peaks above the hedges. Establishes its presence. But yet inside, there’s rot.
And the thing that trickles down the chimney is very sad.
Whatever got it in that state?!
I feel the occupants need to wake up. Perhaps if we sent a ghost into the house some ‘living’ and ‘fixing’ would find inspiration there?
Abandoned houses make me sad. But negligence, (like the kind this one is experiencing) makes me sadder.
Thanks for sharing your lovely poem today, Phillip.
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“Isolation trickled down the chimney ” wow! the movements here are so vivid. and the decay is felt
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Every suburb has one. You put yours on the map.
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Aww poor old couple. Poignant poem
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Five Star 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟
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Reblogged this on LAWS OF LIFE.
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You’ve managed to write a very sad and at the same time beautifully felt poem. The isolation trickling down gave me the shivers, made me want to care for the lonely couple within. And the mail man ignoring it makes it even sadder.
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Thanks so much! Yes they could probably use a visit or two.
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